Story Lancs seasons under Flintstone will it be good

[JD10]

WELCOME TO THE FIRST EDITION OF SKY SPORTS UNDER THE EAGLE EYE AND WE HAVE SOM EXCITING NEWS.YES,YOUNG FREDDIE FLINTSTONE HAS TOOK ON THE TASK TO MANAGE LANCASHIRE CRICKET CLUB AND WE WILL WATCH ALL SEASON EVERY GAME FIRST WE WILL LOOK @ ANY TRANSFERS HE DOES 10 WEEKS BEFORE THE START OF THE SEASON

OUR PRESENTERS ARE RAVI SHASTRI AND IAN "BEEFY" BOTHAM

 

[DPRA]

I take it in the game his name isn't Freddie Flintoff? Its Flinstone?

 

[JD10]

it's Flintstone

 

[Highlander999]

Is the Essex one still happening?

 

[JD10]

no because no one was replying so this one is going to be special trust me

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RS: Welcome to Under the eagle eye and young Freddie has been not too busy in the transfer market but he has bought some experience into the team with Warren,J Lewis (batsman) and M Betts and Beefy is with Lewis

IB:Thats right! Yes, I'm with Lewis and he is really excited with the move to Lancashire but there's no time to talk the toss and Law;Maddy walking to the pitch

IB: Maddy has won the toss and elected to bat !

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TROUGHTON MAKES 100​

TEAM SCORECARD

I Westwood 5
Maddy 39
Trott 53
Troughton 128
Ambrose 42
Louden 21
Powell 25
Brown 7
Giles 17
Tahir 9
Steyn 4 n.o

BOWLING CARD

Cork 31 3 89 3
Betts 24 6 62 1
Chapple 19 1 62 1
M'itharan 42.4 6 106 4
Law 11 3 38 1
Loye 1 0 5 0
Marshall 2 0 4 0

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feedback

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What do you think

 

[banjo6]

Decent but not enough detail.

Read the really successful storys and you will see.

 

[Highlander999]

Yeah, tbh mate your grammer and spelling are pretty shoddy, and you need to work on the presentation. Keep it up though, my first story sucked

 

[treva]

Yeah, tbh mate your grammer and spelling are pretty shoddy, and you need to work on the presentation. Keep it up though, my first story sucked

You can say that again

 

[Highlander999]

You b****** Jack. I have a user title to live up to

 

[JD10]

Sorry Highlander but i can't do my story because i forgot to do the updates

 

[JD10]

Thanks for the advice and i have lost all my stuff so im going to start a England season