I love everything about it apart from the render and the orange/red bits on the right.
The background is really well made and the scanlines suit it really well, it just looks really good, maybe a logo or something could be added to make it a little less empty.
The text is nice and simple, could maybe have a 1px stroke on it and have some small text brushing round it but it works like it is
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The render could be better, the picture is good (a good shot) but his face is too dark, not sure if this is a render effect or the picture used.
You should be proud of that, a great improvement on your other work (not taking anything away from them)
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